an interesting first time
February 25, 2022
Archie was a boy no older than ten, and what he loved most was planes. But Archie had never been on a plane, and whenever he and his parents went to France, they went by boat. around 12 o’clock in Archie’s village, Archie saw plane tickets alongside of the road Archie picked them up and hid them in his wallet. when Archie arrived home he saw his parents looking solemn and sad, they were sick they told him to run as far as he could, he ran… to the airport never stopping he stepped into the plane were a man greeted him “can check your passport?”, he asked.
hi annie i loved your peace of writing.
it was great i really enjoyed how you put detail into the peace because i was so entertained by what the story was about one thing that you could use to make your writing better is you could use action
kind regards Matilda
and i hope you keep writing
Hi Annie, I really liked your story. In particular I thought the description of Archie was great and the connection you made to the plane tickets and his eventual trip to the plane worked really well. The challenge phrase was a great way to end the story. Well done.